By Celine (Gilbert Noel)
the pain recollects behind my eyes
and waste away;
frozen tears for somebody undeserving
of the extent
of intense emotions i puke out
for you.
i read poetry similar to mine
and feel the sharp of your memory
stick into places tender from
abandonment;
a heart i refused to touch
ever since you failed to fix
but succeeded in tearing it
into a project of your own;
lungs i have forgotten to care for
but merely fill with choked up
feelings clinging to smoke and
filth.
i intended to numb the bitter wounds
ripping apart with every breath
but the sickly cluster of your
shameless words and
everything else i swallowed
still burn me like
a rotten carcass.
there are still days when i ponder on
alternatives
to this mess i built as
protection,
and figure out
no matter what i choose
i am still
already gone
and so are you.
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As I read this poem, I find that I have to read it slow. It's as if the writer wants you to read it slow ans soak in all the hurt she has felt. It's interesting how she incorporates love and hurt with bodily, physical pain. For someone like me, who just doesnt get love poems, the writer was able to put it into terms I do understand: puke, (the physical) heart, wounds, carcass...
ReplyDeleteThis poem is pretty intense especially in the word choice the author used in making this poem. Obviously this person if very heart broken both physically and mentally. I think that she will never really get over this or if she does it will still be in her memory and heart because I feel the person she had this problem with will always have a part of her she will never get back...
ReplyDeleteI chose this poem because of it's grotesque wordchoice and connotation of worthlesness. The author has been hurt and describes her experience blatantly yet, beautifully.
ReplyDeletethis poem was fire as well! i feel as if she is showing a different side of love never really seen before primarily because we often dont see many female poets writing about the pains of love and also because she preety much thinks that at the end of the day her love is gone and theres nothing she can do about it
ReplyDeleteThis poem is one that is very dark and solemn. The words like carcass give this dark depressing mood that can be felt as the author talks about heart break. I think the best part about this poem is definitly the word choice, this is also the most important part because its the part that plays the most dramatic role
ReplyDeleteI am all in with Gilbert on this one. i think he nailed it on the head when he said that simply the word choice in this poem is what sets it apart from most of the other poems. i love the strong connotative language and its almost as if i can taste the bile in the writers mouth as they are writing.
ReplyDelete"the pain recollects behind my eyes
ReplyDeleteand waste away;
frozen tears for somebody undeserving
of the extent
of intense emotions i puke out
for you. "
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puking out emotions for you?? thats so intense! This girl is angry and bitter and hurting in the worst way possible. I can't relate but i bet if she could cut him, she would.